Very long, and deeply analytic. And I don’t mean it as a knock: it’s the way you’ve decided to lay this out, as a story, and a reflection of how your mind works.

But I think you might reframe — perhaps after the series is told — as a more journalistic approach, where you put some grand conclusion first — perhaps participatory systemic emergence — and then tell a condensed version of the path to get there as support for the end proposition.